tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6953511231293137959.post3936405051731469279..comments2023-05-04T02:34:24.456-07:00Comments on Romance is in the Air: Perfect Chapter 1Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07023268003403181593noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6953511231293137959.post-8146727477941959112011-07-26T03:42:49.988-07:002011-07-26T03:42:49.988-07:00This is a nice start, Linda. I was a bit confused ...This is a nice start, Linda. I was a bit confused because you started with Veronica's description and I thought she was the lead character but it turns out to be Alex.<br />You might want to consider starting with Alex sitting at the 'edge of her sit' in anticipation waiting for the winner to be announced. I think that would have more of a hook.<br /><br />Nonetheless, I'd love to read the rest. Well done.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.com